Turned me inside out
Lush hedgerows, blossoms bursting
Beauty’s soul exposed
Filed under Haiku, Poetry, Uncategorized
Tagged as beauty, flowers, haiku, hedgerows, joy, nature, spring
Oh That is lovely! I want to lie down on that path and read a book! Your poetry is beautiful!
Thanks Ionia. I enjoyed your blog as well. Especially sorry to read about Trixie.
Lovely Haiku….only change I’d make is in line 2. Make the word burst and remove the ‘ing’. Then there will be a true syllable count of 17.
sorry…I read it wrong. It is perfect…you have your 17. My eyes are in flux with my cataracts.
Thanks for the feedback, Trish. You were kind enough to give critical, helpful feedback – valuable input is something few readers take time to leave. And I can’t tell you how many times I have read haiku, counted syllables, and got a different count each time! 🙂 So your comments are very much appreciated. Bless you.
Truly, there’s no doubt
Of beningness existing,
The blossoms disclosed
Before the leaves left their branches
orange and gold burst from their flesh
and verdant meadows, thick with green
cushioned their fall
and the rains chased them into rivers
and my grandson watched the thousand boats of gold
swirling, disappearing under bridges and walkways
and he called out to them, “Bye leaf! Bye, bye!”
And I smiled as I watched him wave
for I no longer have to say goodbye
A lot said in a few words. I think that’s the key with nature writing. (cut to the chase)
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