Oh say, can you see
gnarled roots, like toes curling into sand,
by the dawn’s early light,
merging soil and tree in perfect union?
What so proudly we hailed
our man-built structures - angled roofs, supportive beams,
at the twilight’s last gleaming
blossomed bed of red and blue and one white pole bearing handsewn cloth,
whose broad stripes and bright stars
carried the vision, the passion of fathers and mothers
through the perilous fight
of sisters and brothers in the name of freedom.
O’er the ramparts we watched
as shells scattered bodies, their limbs, upon this soil,
were so gallantly streaming
blood, tears and screams, while thousands died,
And the rocket’s red glare
reflecting on silent eyes, lids frozen in stares at
the bombs, bursting in air,
wallowing waves of war over survivors’ grief, and
gave proof through the night
in the terrible glow of dues paid in ultimate sacrifice,
that our flag was still there.
With hands on hearts we stand, claiming love for this place.
Oh say, does that star
still carry the night? Throbbing beacon of light,
spangled banner yet wave
as a child beginning life, merging purpose with dreams
o’re the land of the free,
this union of cultures and stories, harbor of refugees
and home of the brave.
The Star Spangled Banner lyrics were written by Francis Scott Key

OH GOSH !!! THIS WAS TRULY AMAZING!!!
this is 3 poems in one!! Alternate lines making for a poem… GOOD GOD!!!
So much sense…. and WHAT STYLE! I am stunned!!!
Quite frankly, I never read ANYTHING like this before! Keep writing such amazing stuff! brrr… am still getting goosebumps..
Have a love 4th of July!!!
Thank you for your kind comments and wishes. I often write, like so many of us, about the things that are wrong in our country, because we have the right to. We have the freedom to expose and resist those things that threaten our rights.
When holidays like the 4th and Memorial Day or Veterans’ Day come around, I am humbled and grateful for what we have and who we are, and for the generations before us that gave so much. Many heroes, from Native Americans to British, Europeans, Africans, Asian, Hispanic – we’ve all given lives and land. It’s good that we have a day to celebrate us as a nation. A crazy, beautiful, imperfect, mishmash of a remarkable nation.
Amen to that!
I would love to post this tomm. for the 4th of July..may I? It’s so powerful! lmk
Lisa – lisakthayer@yahoo.com
This is just awesome!! You are so very talented. I love the feeling of this x
Thank you!
This is lovely brokenpenwriter…truly. I am leading a writing workshop on the 21st…and I would love to share this poem!
I have given a ‘homework assignment’ to bring a short poem or an excerpt of a longer poem with to the workshop. We are going to attempt to do what you have so eloquently done here. May I? Thanks, Sue
What a FAB idea!! I bet your ‘students’ will have a great time working with their poem choice. Please feel free to use mine, and thank you so much for asking. Let me know how the workshop goes – I’d love to read your students’ results. Will they be posted on pomotion?
Also, it would be nice if you give them my blog address and tell them that I really appreciate feedback – it helps to stay motivated for writing when you know you have readers, especially when they too are writers and deal with the same crafting problems and challenges.
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That’s very kind of you, I think… Would you please explain what a trackback is and how I can see it? I visited your website, but couldn’t find it. I’m new to blogging. Thanks!